Eragon's World

Nun, ich brauch mal eure Meinung über nen selbstgeschriebenen Liedtext, hier isser:

Believe


Str.1: If you feel, the task is to difficult,
if you feel, you can't make it
if you feel, that your weakness is coming out,
then you have to....


Refr.:Believe in your strength,
believe in what you know,
believe in your abilities
and show a strong will
then you'll succes.


Str.2: You're scared of what is coming,
you crie, cause you know you'll fail.
Your will is getting weaker.
Fear is what you feel when you think of futur.


Str.3:You think it's your destiny
to fail in this task.
But you can change your destiny,
if you....


Refr.: Believe....

ich kann ja nicht gut englisch aber......


ne frage:

wiso wirst du nicht sänger? xD
texte schreiben kannste ja ziemlich toll..

Ganz einfach, weil ich nich singen kann xD

mhm,dann lernst du es eben..ich will nähmlich was von dir hören!^^

Jo Leutz, wieder mal hab ich mich inspirieren lassen und das ist rausgekommen xD

Only One Tear


Strophe1 :
Your eyes are shining like stars
but they look sad in the morning light.
You don't want to cry, not now.
but one tear comes out of your green eye.

Refrain:
Only one tear, like a star
been catched in a glas, shining bright.
Like a crystal, falling down,
shattering on the floor in front of you.

Strophe 2 :
This tear, showing all your sadness
created in the last night, the deathly night,
'cause of the lose of your friend,
the best you ever had in your life....

Refrain:
Only one tear, like a star,
been catched in a glas, shining bright.
Like a crystal, falling down,
shattering on the floor in front of you.

Strophe 3 :
It's falling down from your cheek,
glimmering, in the light of the new dawn.
This will be the only tear you'll cry out,
here at your friends death place.

Strophe 4 :
You try to catch this tear, to hold it
like you did it with your friend.
But the tear falls through your fingers
and crushes on the floor, in front of you.

Chorus:
If it has come the time, you have to be sad,
then be this, then be sad and cry of the lose
of a good friend, but you have to go on your life.
So cry, but not to long, or your life will never be ok
after this.....

Refrain:
Only one tear, like a star,
been catched in a glas, shining bright.
Like a crystal, falling down,
shattering on the floor in front of you.


Ich bitte euch nur nich dann i-wie zu kopieren und als euers zu nehmen, danke^^

Mhm, meine meinung dazu kensnte eh. x3

meine auch^^aber ich würd trotzdem gerne die von Lydia wissen

Ich find es ganz gut, nur bin ihc halt erher viel Verswchnörkeltes gewöhnt und deswegen erscheint mir das eher leicht wie eine Erzählung. aber ich denk, meine Meinung stimmt voll nicht, weils nur aus reiner Gewohnheit kommt. x3

also mir gefällt der song!ich hab nichts daran auszusetzen..aber ich glaub,als ich ihn das erste mal gelesen hab,war er ein wenig kürzer..aber ich find ihn länger besser..irgendwie..^^

Ja, nachdem du ihn gelesen hattest hab ich noch die 4. Strophe und den Chorus dazu gemacht^^

So, es geht ja nicht mit dem verschicken^^:

Fantasy:
Strophe 1:
Don’t tell you lies,
you know that everybody,
has got the ability to dream,
of an other world, a place unknown.

Refrain:
Fantasy is the key,
For everything you want to be,
Tell yourself you aren’t afraid
And everything can become true.

Strophe 2:
Discover who you are,
Who you want to be,
In this world you’re the only one,
You can do what you want,
It’s a world, where everything is true.

Refrain:
Fantasy is the key,
For everything you want to be,
Tell yourself you aren’t afraid
And everything can become true.

Strophe 3:
Run through your mind,
search for the key to this place,
you can only find,
with your own fantasy(2x)

Refrain:
Fantasy is the key,
For everything you want to be,
Tell yourself you aren’t afraid
And everything can become true.

(Sry das ich erst jetzt hier reinposte ^^")

Der Liedtext is echt goil ö.ö

Mir gefällt er sehr. Hm das "Key" und "be" riemt sich sogar etwas. Echt kuhl wenn mans sich durchliest <3

Naja ich hab auch mal noch einen Text:

The Wanderer

Bridge:
Wanderer! Wandering!
All the time.
No rest no sleep.
Until the end.

Refrain:
Just him, a lonely warrior
with his sword, wandering
through the lands of eternity
on the way of swordsmanship.....

Strophe 1:
He wandered trough all lands
Of the elves and of the dwarfs
He saw all of them, all people
he will never forget....

Strophe 2:
A wanderer, older than the dwarfs
in their hales made of stone
Older than the elves
in their magical forests.

Chorus:
A lonely soul, damned
damned to wander on the earth
in the name of the swordsmanship
so long, until peace rules the world
but the moment is far away
and he has to fight
to realise it, his big dream
of peace....

Bridge:
Wanderer! Wandering!
All the time.
No rest no sleep.
Until the end.

Refrain:
Just him, a lonely warrior
with his sword, wandering
through the lands of eternity
on the way of swordsmanship.....

O.o
Der is ja mal richtig geilo!

Gefällt mir echt volle^^

Metalmädel^^ hat geschrieben:O.o
Der is ja mal richtig geilo!

Gefällt mir echt volle^^

Du müsstest aus dem Text 2 Texte erkennen die es schon gibt. Hab mich etwas bedient an dem was schon ist x3 ( denke ich mal ^^)

Öhm jupp, Wanderer halt
Aber trotzdem ziemlich cool!